I recently hired a ghostwriting company. They promised to help me develop my animation project, create a pilot, and pitch it to a major production studio. The total cost is 4,500, but the person I’m in contact with is looking into whether I can make monthly payments of 300, since I can’t afford the full amount upfront. The problem is, I suspect the messages I’m receiving are generated by an AI rather than a real person. At first, they said we would produce a 10-minute pilot, but now they claim it will only be a 50-second teaser. There are many inconsistencies, highly suspicious behavior, and phrasing that doesn’t sound human. Furthermore, the company has very few reviews, is not well-known, and their Instagram account features only comments made by bots.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1PBqu5llaMDFsY4vYh5KgXhOtNkbPb0jbfakWZsyAvok/edit?usp=drivesdk

This is a summary/ treatment for BUZZ. A satire film I’m developing. Will move onto beat sheet phase assuming the general plot/ arcs work. Let me know what you think.

Title The Last Relic

Format feature

Page Length 112

Genre Action/adventure + sci fi

Logline An atheist Navy medic grieving the loss of her fiancé is recruited into an order of female relic guardians and must choose between resurrecting her lost love or prevent their greatest foe from using the most powerful artifact from igniting the apocalypse.

(I've never really liked any logline I've generated for this - very open to rewrites)

Comps I describe this as street level Avengers mixed with the Da Vinci Code meet Indiana Jones in a Stargate. It's silly mad fun with a costumed team.

Feedback Firstly i'd like to know how people respond to it. I'm fully aware that it plays with formatting "rules" sometimes. Like to know you have fun on the ride? Anything sticking/bumping? Most interested how it works as a sample...

And on that note, what do you more seasoned industry members think I should do with it? Any out of the box suggestions>?

Link https://drive.google.com/file/d/1s4T35CfyZoOofkHd4D74aDv-m_HitAb-/view?usp=sharing

Hey everyone!
I’ve been working on a feature screenplay and have made several revisions, I’d love to get some honest feedback from the community.

Format: Feature Film
Genre: Dark Corporate Satire / Crime Thriller
Length: 108 pages
Pages for Feedback: 1–10

Logline:
A predatory fast-food giant exploits body positivity to disguise its controversial cost-cutting practices. Meanwhile, a grieving line cook plots violent revenge against the company. A conflicted executive struggles to reform it from within, unaware that his next corporate meal will end in catastrophe.

Script Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/18WsELp4g0ugTFNVgXN0fxkF5FFQUdxI8/view?usp=drivesdk

I’m particularly interested in the opening hook, pacing, dialogue, character introductions, and whether the first 10 pages give you a reason to keep reading.

I’m open to any feedback, positive or negative. If something feels confusing, unnecessary, unrealistic, or poorly written, please point it out. I genuinely want to improve the screenplay.

Thank you to anyone who takes the time to read it. I appreciate it!

As the saying goes: "Write about scars, not your open wounds." Yet right now, I struggle to write about either my scars or my wounds. A while ago my mother was diagnosed with a terminal disease and my entire life is undergoing a profound shift.

I don't want to go into too much detail, but I am accompanying her through her illness. I have to give up a lot because I am taking care of everything because I have already lost my father, and my sister isn't much help.

I keep a journal of sorts to hold on to what is happening. I would like to turn it into a story, but I don't know how. I find it hard to change things or adjust them for dramatic effect, because holding on to the unvarnished reality is far more important to me right now. At the same time, I can't bring myself to write about anything else because everything else seems utterly trivial in light of my mother's situation. I have long struggled with writer's block, and I've always questioned why I should even tell fictional stories in the first place. But now, that feels even truer. I used to be on a good path toward making a living from writing, but now nothing is moving forward.

SIX

Half Hour Pilot

37 Pages

Comedy/Family

Logline: A father's plan for his next chapter are disrupted when four of his adult children are forced to move back home.

I'm a fairly new writer and have a sitcom pilot that is a little too long (37 pages). Looking to swap with anyone for some initial feedback :) Main concerns: unsure what to cut, worried there is just too much content, worried it's lacking comedic tone

This feels like it should be obvious, because in real life, it is. I want a Nintendo Switch, but I need food & water.

But things are a little different in writing, no? The way I understand it, the want is the goal the character is consciously chasing, and the need is the thing they're subconsciously chasing.

In a romance, the leads need to be together by the end of the film. So can it be said that one lead needs the other? Or is that just what they want, and the need is something deeper, like learning to let go of the past?

It feels like the two blur together a lot!

Overthinking has been a running theme ever since I was a child. Im pretty sure being sensitive is related to many people wanting to write in the first place. Any one here took SSRIs for your writing career? How does it work out for you? My therapist recommended me to be open to all sort of help, but I had really bad memories with antidepressants. If anyone could share their experiences or opinions I will be very grateful. Just wanna hear it and wish to discuss more. Thanks!

Title: The Frontiers

Format: Feature

Genre: Comedy

Pages: 106

Draft Status: Work in Progress

Longline:

Two guys quickly realize that their friend is in the hands of a drug kingpin after a night of hardcore partying. This will lead to three days of pure chaos, with explosions and bullets flying everywhere.

I posted yesterday. I got some really good advice and feedback. I added the character introductions and shortened the script. I am sorry if I behaved rudely yesterday. It was not my intention. I really care about this script. Please tell me what you think.

Link:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1X2HbaRxpznzvoJpiFbOIvf97bXL_O9UP/view?usp=sharing

Title: The Vix

Format: TV Pilot

Page Length: 42 Pages

Genres: Drama/Comedy

Logline: When a desperate aspiring day trader borrows money from a childhood friend turned small-time criminal, he must convince the man and his crew he can teach them to trade when his debt comes due - despite never having made a real profit himself.

Feedback Concerns: I wrote this over a year ago and recently did a huge rewrite, focusing on more on pacing and cutting back on financial exposition. Looking for any feedback.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1iH_spuBYioLeP7xFSPHQ-Qch3mpxkYrz/view?usp=sharing