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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
A number of people believe in open choice to study whatever any student wants to but a lot of people suggest to restrict students to certain subjects. Although, limiting students to those subjects whose graduates get high pay can help them live a luxurious life but I think one should choose the field which they are passionate about. On the one hand, it is necessary to have a good source of income. Studying and being excellent in STEM fields increase chances of any person to get a good job with a decent pay because engineers are always needed for construction, people always get sick, so, doctors are required for their treatment, similarly, there is a high demand of IT graduates during this period of technology and AI. Therefore, People with these type of degrees face less trouble in finding jobs and get high pays. For example, some of the highest paid professions in US are doctors, engineers and computer science graduates. On the other hand, a person should always choose a field which they feel passionate about because there is no joy in working in a field with no interest in it.Passion drives people crazy and they are committed to do more than they can and become something extraordinary. No one has become great by working in a field that they were not passionate about. All the greats in every field were eager to learn about it. They found their true purpose and excelled in that field. For example, Hasan raheem chose to be a musician beside being a doctor and became a successful one because it was his passion to be. In conclusion, Although STEM fields can guarantee a secure future, I believe students should be free to choose subjects because eagerness and passion leads to greateness.