r/ReadMyScript • u/dameyen_maymeyen • 8d ago
Short Not a proper script but I would like feedback for the monologue of my college application video
I hope this doesn’t break the rules so if it does let me know and I’ll repost tomorrow.
r/ReadMyScript • u/dameyen_maymeyen • 8d ago
I hope this doesn’t break the rules so if it does let me know and I’ll repost tomorrow.
r/ReadMyScript • u/Murky-Blueberry-9077 • 8d ago
Logline: Stranded in rural Cape Breton, a group of friends fight to survive supernatural entities who erase their victims from reality and memory.
Genre: Gaelic Folk Horror / Supernatural Thriller
Page Count: 107 pages
Locations: Rural Cape Breton: roadside, gas station, an isolated farmhouse (dining room, kitchen, garage, hallways, bedrooms, nursery), the Chamber of Names, Main Street
Cast: 6 Leads (Sophie, Alex, Liv, Ethan, Jack, Jessica), all attached via LOI; 2 Antagonists (Silas, Caleb, Mother)
Looking for an experienced Lead Producer, investors, or production companies interested in a Gaelic-language folk horror feature with a queer love story at its core, a locked cast, and a full pre-production package in place.
DM me or leave a comment if you'd like to read the script!
r/ReadMyScript • u/Aleksei616 • 8d ago
r/ReadMyScript • u/Disastrous-Plastic76 • 8d ago
Hi All - here's another script I wrote. A Hitchcockian suspense thriller I am trying to pitch.
Would love any thoughts/feedback -- what worked/what you want to see more of/less of.
Enjoy!
Title: Listening
Genre(s): Suspense, thriller
Page count: 104
Logline: A grad student secretly recording his elderly landlords for his thesis research becomes the sole witness to a brutal murder—and is pulled into a deadly game of silence and survival in which he can’t expose the truth without incriminating himself.
r/ReadMyScript • u/Disastrous-Plastic76 • 8d ago
Hi all! Writer and Director based in LA. Gonna start posting some scripts on this group just for feedback and thoughts. Just scripts I have written to have in the bank for now.
Just a forewarning: my writing style is more that of a director's, it's auteur-ish and can be often heavy on description (I'm aware), that's just how I write. This script was intentionally written to be long, with a big cast of characters. Think breakfast club meets boogie nights meets goodfellas. It's an epic, which, by nature, are episodic and longer. Nothing that I am shopping around to producers or managers at the moment -- this is something I'd like to make someday in the future. more for the long term.
Would love any thoughts -- what worked/what you'd wanna see more of/less of, etc.
enjoy!
Title: Emerald Valley
Genre(s): Coming of age, comedy, dramedy, drama, satire, epic
Tone: Satirical, melodramatic, glossy,
Pg. Count: 153
Logline: The chronicles of Brady Thompson and his friends navigating identity, first loves, and growing up during their junior year of high school in Overland Park, Kansas, 2016.
r/ReadMyScript • u/screenwriter777__7 • 8d ago
r/ReadMyScript • u/screenwriter777__7 • 8d ago
r/ReadMyScript • u/screenwriter777__7 • 8d ago
\[PROJECT PITCH\] GIANT DECEPTION — Action/Creature-Horror Feature (Black Hawk Down meets Predator). Loosely based on the viral Kandahar Giant
Title: GIANT DECEPTION
Logline: When an elite Navy SEAL team is lured into a remote Afghan mountain pass by an insurgent trap, they discover the true enemy isn't the militia they were hunting—it's a pair of aggressive, fifteen-foot prehistoric humanoids awakened deep within the caves.
Format: Feature Film (104 Pages) / Looking to develop a high-impact cinematic trailer or proof-of-concept short.
Genre: Military Tactical Thriller / Creature Horror (Black Hawk Down
This screenplay is loosely based on the viral "Giant of Kandahar" military urban legend, which was recently detailed on the Joe Rogan Experience by an ex-Navy SEAL who encountered the lore firsthand while serving in Afghanistan. The story leans heavily into a raw, authentic military perspective—blending real-world tactical mechanics with the dark mystery hidden inside isolated cave networks.
Why this is tailor-made for an AI production pipeline or Indie Producer:
Built-in Viral Audience: The Kandahar Giant is one of the most famous, heavily discussed modern military mysteries on the internet. A cinematic trailer or proof-of-concept short targeting this specific niche carries immense built-in viral potential.
Grounded Assets vs. Massive Scale: Advanced video tools excel at rendering rigid mechanical objects like military gear, Humvees, Black Hawks, and uniforms. This allows us to pull off intense tactical operations and visceral combat against 15-foot Giants using primitive stone weapons—all without a legacy $150M studio budget.
Advanced Technical Showcases: The script is packed with perfect opportunities to flex cinematic technical skills, including high-intensity night-vision/thermal camera sequences, cave dust/smoke particle physics, and strict physical asset tracking.
What I Have:
A structurally locked, fully polished, industry-standard 104-page script.
What I'm Seeking:
I am looking to connect with a visionary indie producer, director, AI animator, or technical video editor who wants to move away from generic concept loops and sink their teeth into a hyper-realistic, narrative-driven action thriller. Let’s partner up, pool our skills, and bring this legendary myth to life.
If you're interested in reading the script or checking out the 1-page treatment, drop a comment below or send me a DM!
https://youtu.be/T92e0aaizaI?is=L2-S8XYpytpm3XU0
This is Mr. Ballen covering the story 6 years ago. I saw this video and started writing the screenplay 4 years ago. Mr. Ballen \[an ex Navy Seal himself with 11.3 million subscribers on YouTube\] was just a guest on The Joe Rogan Experience last month where he told this story. Him, along with two other guests, spoke on the story of the encounter with the Red Giant of Kandahar within weeks of each other.
r/ReadMyScript • u/Bagofjellybeanss • 9d ago
Title: The Greenwood Incident
Format: Feature
Genres: Horror/ Thriller
Logline: After a government containment failure, a strained group of friends spiral into vicious paranoia in a remote california mountain home as an entity hides among them wearing human form.
Feedback Concerns: This is the first couple
pages of my story. I’m interested in hearing if the beginning gives just enough urgency while leaving room for mystery and if the transition to the party is still interesting enough to keep you invested to see the eventual unravel.
r/ReadMyScript • u/Janzsin • 9d ago
Logline: Truancy is about how students, parents, and faculty don't know what they want or believe in until violating it gives them something they want and gradually wanting more of it.Truancy
r/ReadMyScript • u/Intelligent_Past_768 • 9d ago
Title: AT THE TOP
Format: Short Film
PL: 24
Genres: Horror, Drama, Coming of Age
LL: When a rich yet entitled and insecure teenager begins receiving mysterious, seductive calls from a “secret admirer” on his landline, he becomes consumed by the attention. But as he feeds his ego and hides the truth from those around him, the caller begins to weaponize his desires, and his actions start to carry deadly consequences.
Thanks for reading if you do! I want to make this thing soon! But am open to changes, I think it's a decent script. I like to steal from movies I like and other shit I like. I am young and just wanna write and make movies! Give me to it straight and be honest! Thanks!
Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1yp5J_ZU8zIZ3D5PytJGy0N2KM-r6GQIQ/view?usp=sharing
r/ReadMyScript • u/Electrical-Medium698 • 9d ago
I’m currently part way through writing a feature script, and am looking for some feedback on what I have so far.
Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1MSuqKpMvquEkUQcGEQ4-Z_KVNjvHbwQZ/view?usp=drivesdk
Genre: Coming-of-age drama / sci-fi
Logline: A 19-year-old who has spent years studying a strange meteor crater on his island is pulled into something much larger when an independent research team arrives and discovers that his observations may have unexpected significance.
Pages: 51
I’m mainly interested in where you felt most and least engaged, whether the characters felt distinct, what you think the film is promising from here, and anything that felt repetitive, confusing or slow. But general reactions are welcome too.
r/ReadMyScript • u/Civil_Willow_3231 • 10d ago
Genre: Comedy/Drama
Max Pages: 111 Pages
Date: 28-08-1998
Draft: Unknown
Goals: Personal Research
Extra Information: It's a Remake of The Man Who Came To Dinner (1941) by Julius & Philip Epstein
r/ReadMyScript • u/Intelligent_Past_768 • 10d ago
Title: AT THE TOP
Format: Short Film
PL: 24
Genres: Horror, Drama, Coming of Age
LL: When a rich yet entitled and insecure teenager begins receiving mysterious, seductive calls from a “secret admirer” on his landline, he becomes consumed by the attention. But as he feeds his ego and hides the truth from those around him, the caller begins to weaponize his desires, and his actions start to carry deadly consequences.
Thanks for reading if you do! I want to make this thing soon! But am open to changes, I think it's a decent script. I like to steal from movies I like and other shit I like. I am young and just wanna write and make movies! Give me to it straight and be honest! Thanks!
Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1yp5J_ZU8zIZ3D5PytJGy0N2KM-r6GQIQ/view?usp=sharing
r/ReadMyScript • u/EvanCarestiaWriter • 10d ago
Hi everyone! My name is Evan. After years of writing in private, I’m finally putting my work out into the world!
SemiCircle is a 27-episode animated series script centered on societal injustice, corruption, and a violent rebellion in an original fantasy world.
Logline: After reaching her breaking point, dealing with corrupt authority figures and an abusive family member, our heroine Kanoe runs away to a fabled island where people supposedly treat each other kindly and with respect.
It’s only when she arrives that she realizes this new land is full of even more immorality than the home she ran away from. She is captured, enslaved, humiliated— igniting a fiery rage deep inside her. With fury and bloodlust, she sparks a violent rebellion against her captors and vows to lead her fellow slaves to a better tomorrow, by dismantling the current systems of power.
I'd love to get feedback on the character dynamics, pacing, and overall flow of Episode 1!
I’m not overly concerned about the formatting, more so feedback on the story and characters.
Read / Download Episode 1 PDF: https://evancarestia.substack.com/p/semicircle-episode-1-kanoe-mezra?r=5m38p2&utm_campaign=post-expanded-share&utm_medium=web
SemiCircle © 2026 Evan Carestia. All Rights Reserved.
r/ReadMyScript • u/RogueKnight77 • 11d ago
It’s just 14 pages long rn!
r/ReadMyScript • u/Even_Cauliflower_965 • 11d ago
TRAMA DE GUION
Tinenes un teléfono viejo y ya sin servir que nisiquiera prende, pero un día buscando y ordenando tus cosas lo encuentras en una caja que dice "cosas Meyli" abres la caja y vez objetos de pertenencia que alguna vez utilizaste en tu niñez, entre ellos ves un teléfono viejo y con fonda azul que de la pantalla está muy roto y con muchas partes de la funda caída. Bueno aún así decides conservarlo en eso te llaman para comer porque vives solo con tu mamá y tu mamá se tiene que ir por viaje de trabajo a otro País ( te dejará sola por 2 semanas) te recuerda que cuáles son las reglas a seguir cuando ella no está y cuáles son tus responsabilidades.... Bueno terminas de comer, se despide tu mamá de ti y se va cerrando tu la puerta, justo después unos 20 minutos después de que tú mamá se va agarras la tele y pones música como media turbia o de piano un poco incómoda y te sientas en la sala a leer revistas ( ya que es tu pasatiempo favorito ) y en eso en lo que lees empieza a sonar un teléfono, lo oyes pero piensas que es el de casa, así que no le das tanta importancia... Bueno, sigues leyendo y a los 10 segundos .... Empieza otra vez el sonido del teléfono pero ahora más cerca ... Está vez decides mejor ir a revisar, primero vas abajo pero no hay nada, cuando subes te das cuanta de que el teléfono está afuera de la caja y con un registro de llamada de un número telefónico que según allí dicen que no existe ..... Te quedas confundía porque como encendió el teléfono y como pudo ser posible que estaba afuera si lo dejaste en la caja de tus cosas viejas ......
r/ReadMyScript • u/Faizanhala • 11d ago
r/ReadMyScript • u/traffxrd • 11d ago
THE DEBT
Format: Short Film
Length: 26 pages
Draft: First Draft
Genre: Crime Thriller / Drama
5-PAGE EXCERPT:
👉 https://drive.google.com/file/d/1kYSwTJwFzVtr-KD_92KvUP8EvoY-KZvF/view?usp=sharing
Logline:
A desperate man is given one chance to erase his £20,000 debt - kill the stranger waiting in a car outside. Only to discover the target is his own brother, forcing him to choose between saving his life and destroying his family.
I'm looking for some honest feedback on pages 11–15 of my short film.
These five pages are where the main conflict is introduced. Callum is given a gun and told to deal with the man waiting outside, with the excerpt ending on the reveal of who is actually sitting in the car.
I'd particularly like feedback on:
It's a first draft, so I'm completely open to criticism. Don't hold back, I'm genuinely looking for honest feedback and things I can improve.
Thanks to anyone who takes the time to read it. 🙏🎬
r/ReadMyScript • u/henksutti • 11d ago
Title: Quick Fixes
Format: Short
Page Length: 28
Genre: Comedy Drama
Logline: After their group project goes missing the night of the deadline, four classmates are forced to stay at school overnight to recreate it, confronting their failing friendship in the process.
Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1C4LfcLbq-Ty6eun17uUDS6EQpk6df7Mo/view?usp=drivesdk
Feedback Concerns: Pre-Shooting Draft. Any major must-fixes? I'm really curious about if the sequence of reveals at the end makes sense, and if the thematic parallels between the presentation and the group are a) clear and/or b) effective enough? How are the character dynamics; any decisions/conflicts which aren't fleshed out enough?
Thank you!
r/ReadMyScript • u/AtrociousKO_1642 • 12d ago
Just finished my second draft of this script for my Directing Class. I appreciate all the feedback I got from you guys last time. My professor and classmates gave me some notes regarding the ending and some of the dialogue, so I tried my best to address and would appreciate any and all feedback on the current version of the script.
Title: The Group Chat
Format: Short Film
Page Length: 8 pgs.
Genre: Comedy, Drama
Logline: A young man spirals after discovering his friends have a secret group chat without him.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/18B17uc08lh-4X-nhUZpN1FM-QfQ5NlP8/view?usp=drivesdk
Feedback concerns: Does the tone feel consistent? Does the story/dialogue flow well and make sense? Is it structured well?
Thanks!