r/OCPoetry • u/Namelecc • 10h ago
Just Sharing Rain
Thunder booms and lightning crashes
The sky opens up, pouring its misery out on the land
The trees shudder and brace for impact
The earth screams as it gets washed away
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Worms flail helplessly in newly formed oceans
People scamper for cover from the wet bullets
Kids watch the battle from the windows
Zeus smiles down at his creation
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And suddenly, it’s over
The sun peaks out from behind its cloudy blinds
The day resumes, but better than before
Somehow, the heavenly catharsis has become our own
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https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1x69kbz/comment/pgtul2l/?context=3
https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1x677c9/comment/pgt62l7/?context=3
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u/AbbreviationsKey5425 8h ago
I think this is very beautiful and it really makes me think about my bad days. Such terrible things happen but the next day can be bright as has happened on several occasions for me. Thank you for your poem, I love to read something that has me reflecting on myself :)
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u/AutomaticSoapDispnsr 8h ago
Mmm I just love a poem who's last line makes me smile in surprise like this one did! I especially like that you wrote about something that can be cliche, but your poem didn't feel cliche at all. the catharsis was felt. simple, sweet, and refreshing. my second favorite line was zeus - it's cheeky and breaks up the violent imagery that comes before it, getting the reader ready for some reprieve from the storm.
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